My senses
I hear cars brakes screech and it makes my body shiver. Cars start there engines and then see there lights go red as they stop. A radio is booming in my ears as loud as thunder in the sky. I fell my car vibrate as I start the engines to move forward in line. I smell smoke coming from the torn down city I see the smoke rising from the tall buildings into the sky. I taste the smokey smell in my mouth as it lingered across the air.
Paris, you had very descriptive writing, but some of it didn't make sense to me. It was also a bit short and you could have extended it more. You have no spelling mistakes. I think you could have put some similes in there too :) Nicole
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